When i miss you ...


When i miss you
I just close my eyes
And think of you 
When i miss you.

Those lovely days
I had the craze to graze in thy eyes
And seek my love in ten million ways 
Those lovely days

When i took your hand
It felt so warm
With all the love that we deserved
Ohh !!! when i took your hand.

I hope you knew 
The promises were true
I gave you my heart
I hope you knew that was all i had.

Yet you tossed my heart
With your randomn taunts
And it swirled around before crumbling to ground
Ohh!! You tossed my heart ....

You decided to hurt me
As you failed to understand
That true love is hard to find
Yet you hurt me,in your own kind.

It was you
And you know it too
Cannot cut out my heart because it is there you belong
Ohh !! it's true , you would never get the clue.
~[A][B]~

20 comments:

Rupanjana said...

Hey... it seems to end abruptly.... I mean continuity is lost somewhere... would like you to write some more on this...

abhinav said...

@Rups
i have deliberately ended it this way , it symbolizes the end of partial sadness the character starts feeling down te flow and then suddenly grows weary of it and shakes and moves forward with life...
Atleast that was the intention .. dont know how much i succeeded.

Anonymous said...

gud it was.... almost perfect...

Gopikaa Ramanan said...

that was a good one abhinav. enjoyed reading it.

abhinav said...

Thanks Gopika for motivating me further. Hope u enjoyed the other posts too :)

jyoti said...

gud one...liked it

abhinav said...

Thanks Jyoti !!!

Rose said...

Hey!
I visited here after your redirected me to your blog.(from writer's lounge).
Very well written, bringing out the feeling of missing someone really well. Though the ending was abrupt. :)
I know its a pretty late response, but blame my lazy bones for that! :)

Abhinav Rastogi said...

@Rose
thanks for reading my work.
hope u liked the other posts too.

as for the abrupt ending please have a look at the second comment .

it says -->
i have deliberately ended it this way , it symbolizes the end of partial sadness the character starts feeling down te flow and then suddenly grows weary of it and shakes and moves forward with life...
Atleast that was the intention .. dont know how much i succeeded.

~[A][B]~

Anonymous said...

very nice.. i specially like the ending .. the last two lines..
let work like this keep coming !!!!

Abhinav Rastogi said...

@ anonymous
thanks !!! hope u enjoyed the other posts too ...

~[A][B]~

Skin Care said...

Nice to read your blog. You seem to be very friendly and deep thinker.
I appreciate your wordings.

gargi said...

hattz off to you sir.... rly commndbl..!!

abhinav rastogi said...

@gargi Thanks for appreciating my work !!

Pinky said...

awesome!!

abhinav rastogi said...

@Pinky
Thanks again !!! :)

neha gupta said...

its amazing...:)

sHoNa said...

Beautifully penned:)

abhinav rastogi said...

@neha Thanks for reading the post ... hope you enjoyed the other posts in the blog too !!

abhinav rastogi said...

@sHoNa thank you so much ... it feels nice to be appreciated by a person who is so good a blogger herself.

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