With a pen in my hand
I thought of writing something new
With the second thought my imagination flew
It soared in the astral plain
Where every thing was joyous, no pain
The fountain of youth shimmered with the golden glow
And i wondered , the charm paid the tow.
It continually dragged me towards it
As if calling me to experience life with it's hallow.
It appeared and vanished
And my imagination was vanquished
I wanted to experience more of it
And pen down everything as a gist.
I could have achieved the youth but darn,
I was so astonished with its charm
That i never cared where it belonged
All i wanted to do was watch it glow
With full might for the people below.
-- [A][B]
6 comments:
Nice.. This time I found the portrayal better than the actual feeling of the writer..I mean.. what caught me were the words rather than that 'something wonderful' that ensnared the writer.. keep rocking!
hey..one post shows deleted since I posted it twice..so nothing that I said and took back :)
thanks Shilpa !! i was really worried on this post because i tried something different and was not getting comments on whether i should actually continue on such philosophical line of portrayal of expression ... thanks ur comment means a lot for my morale !!!
Classy work boy .. highly impressive .. :)
thanks Madhur!!
anything that i need to improve or the level of depth i shud portray??
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